Talk:Summer Wars/Archive 1

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Talk:Summer Wars/Archive 1

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:: Give me some time to reword this bit. As it stands it would feel awkward going into the production section. [[User:Ggctuk|ggctuk (2005)]] ([[User talk:Ggctuk|talk]]) 19:57, 21 April 2011 (UTC)
:: Give me some time to reword this bit. As it stands it would feel awkward going into the production section. [[User:Ggctuk|ggctuk (2005)]] ([[User talk:Ggctuk|talk]]) 19:57, 21 April 2011 (UTC)

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== Copyedit March 2011 ==

Hi

During the copyedit some things came to light that ''may'' need attention:

;Lead
* "With the aid of upper-classman Natsuki Shinohara's" - not sure what this is, if it is someone from school in a higher class, or referring to an [[Upper class|upper-class]] person.

;Plot
* "professor who has been gone for ten years." - Gone from where?

;Box office performance
* "..United States the film grossed $1,412 in its opening.." - were the figures really that low? If so should this not be quantified by "United States box office takings were not so good with the film grossing..." or "something similar?
* "had grossed $80,678 in North America." - This includes Canada, Mexico, etc.? [[North_America#Countries_and_territories]] - also first para next section.

;Film festival screenings
* "''Summer Wars'' had its North American premiere" - The previous section says that the first North American screening was going to be in Chicago, but it says here it was in NY?
* "dub of the film premiered at the [[New York International Children's Film Festival]] on November 20, 2010" - that page says the film festival takes place in March every year.

;Critical response
* "establish himself as truly a master story teller." - The ref here was exactly the same as the next one. Both were from the Brown page ''[Our thanks to Guillem Rosset for the following review.]" [http://twitchfilm.com/reviews/2009/10/sitges-09-summer-wars-review.php]. This is not by Brown at all it seems...I have combined them both in to one ref. Care must be taken here, this site appears to be owned by Brown but he is publishing reviews in an almost IMDB like format.

;Accolades
* "The film was screened at the [[Hong Kong Asian Film Festival]] and the [[Leeds International Film Festival]].{{cite news | last = Chu | first = Karen | title = Tian's 'Warrior' to open HKAFF | url = http://www.hollywoodreporter.com/hr/content_display/world/news/e3i74837948a5cbe20da903cd632f141cb1 | work = [[The Hollywood Reporter]] | date = September 18, 2009 | accessdate = October 15, 2009}} {{Dead link|date=October 2010|bot=H3llBot}}{{cite web | title = Summer Wars | url = http://www.leedsfilm.com/films.aspx?id=1083 | publisher = [[Leeds International Film Festival]] | date = | accessdate = October 13, 2009}}" are not really accolades?

;Notes
* Ensure that quotations are correctly punctuated. If the original has a comma it goes inside " ," if not it goes outside " ", same with periods.
* Dates using the American method should have commas: "April 1, 2010 was" should be "April 1, 2010, was".
* Accolades - one paragraph was very long so I separated them to leave the NY reviews as one block para.

[[User:Chaosdruid|Chaosdruid]] ([[User talk:Chaosdruid|talk]]) 10:15, 20 March 2011 (UTC)
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